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Looking for constructive criticism on a video I made
- Thread starter deerhuntinghippie
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Really cool video. Definitely worth the time to watch and listen. Thanks for sharing.
Really cool deal here. Nice work. I liked it. I would turn the music down a bit...clearly I am no expert, but the music drowned out your poem just a bit. But still awesome work! I feel like that when I walk in the woods- my most favorite experiences is when wild animals pass by and they never notice I was there- makes me feel like I am part of the woods, almost as if the animal is trespassing in my home. Thanks for sharing!
Loved it!!!!!! Very nice video and the story line is great. Music just a tad bit loud but I thought the voice over was spot on. I appreciate you covering a topic so dear to my southerners heart. Keep up the good work and teach those kids about the outdoors as much as possible because they are the future of our outdoors. Idea for next topic would be a similar video but based of a kids point of view. Again great video and keep them coming
I enjoyed it :0)
Bring the volume up just a tad on the talking ...
Bring the volume up just a tad on the talking ...
Cool.
The guitar definitely drowns out the narration.
The voice is way too soft and too much sustain... Sounds like too much echo/ muffled.
Crisp up the voice with less echo and bring down the guitar notes.
A couple spots on the video where you pull back your bow then the camera shifts to you running in the field or to a girl running which gives the impression you're going to shoot someone.
Need to show a deer stop and sniff the air at those moments or something similar, maybe hitting a target.
Liked the coyote too.... Did you film that or borrow it?
Spots where you are frolicking in the field I couldn't help to wonder if you were shooting a spoof and I couldn't help to think someone was going to come running into view from the side and tackle you at full speed....LOL.
I found myself straining to hear exactly what you were saying so I turned it up but that made the guitar way too loud and sort of annoying.
Add some four wheeler fun, shooting some guns, sharpening spears with knives, and stuff with the guys, pan on several different peoples faces, the more weathered the beyyer, but definitely include your lady giving you a kiss when you come home from work or after dragging a log up the hill or something manly.
Work out a script and then go film the shots.
I kept waiting for a babe in daisy dukes and a flannel shirt tied in a knot to drive up in a pickup truck to come rescue you when your truck broke down.
Zombies?.. Yes add some zombies.
The guitar definitely drowns out the narration.
The voice is way too soft and too much sustain... Sounds like too much echo/ muffled.
Crisp up the voice with less echo and bring down the guitar notes.
A couple spots on the video where you pull back your bow then the camera shifts to you running in the field or to a girl running which gives the impression you're going to shoot someone.
Need to show a deer stop and sniff the air at those moments or something similar, maybe hitting a target.
Liked the coyote too.... Did you film that or borrow it?
Spots where you are frolicking in the field I couldn't help to wonder if you were shooting a spoof and I couldn't help to think someone was going to come running into view from the side and tackle you at full speed....LOL.
I found myself straining to hear exactly what you were saying so I turned it up but that made the guitar way too loud and sort of annoying.
Add some four wheeler fun, shooting some guns, sharpening spears with knives, and stuff with the guys, pan on several different peoples faces, the more weathered the beyyer, but definitely include your lady giving you a kiss when you come home from work or after dragging a log up the hill or something manly.
Work out a script and then go film the shots.
I kept waiting for a babe in daisy dukes and a flannel shirt tied in a knot to drive up in a pickup truck to come rescue you when your truck broke down.
Zombies?.. Yes add some zombies.
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I thought it was very good! As others have said, the guitar was a bit loud but I loved your voice. To me, the tone and the volume fit perfectly with the story you were telling. It really made me pay attention and reflect on what you were saying. You can always go back and reshoot scenes if you think they are jumpy or just don't quite fit. You are an artist and a poet sir and I congratulate you. Takes a lot of guts to put your stuff out for others to critique. I hope you do more projects that you will share.
I like the low whisper, it has a soothing sound. But, I definitely missed a few words. Would it be possible to have a disappearing text on the screen with the words? I know they are in the description, but you cant read that and watch the video at the same time. Done tastefully, I think it can be something that can help convey your words to the watcher without having to raise the volume of your voice.
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